Lunchtime partoum

[msfledermaus]

Yummy sandwich, piping hot,
Grilled Cheese and potato chips,
I think I'll go out for lunch...
This will be a happy treat.

Grilled cheese and potato chips,
Wonder what I want to drink?
This will be a happy treat.
The diner is nice and quiet.

Wonder what I want to drink?
I wish I had brought a book.
This diner is nice and quiet.
Potato chip crumbs in my lap.

I wish I had brought a book.
Yummy sandwich, piping hot,
Potato chip crumbs in my lap.
I think I'll go out for lunch...


Thanks, Banana, for teaching me how partoums work. (It's a mind-bending Malaysian poetry form. Cooooool!

Comments

[andrianna.livejournal.com]

1) Looks like I'll have to learn this form. *peers over at Banana's journal*

and

2) I'll stick w/a lunchtime hiaku for right now.....

Pint of Ben and Jerry's
Jerry's Jubilee for me.
What of nutrition?

Re:

[msfledermaus.livejournal.com]

What, indeed? it's got ummm, friut and dairy!!!
Tha's good, isn't it?

[andrianna.livejournal.com]

And chocolate.....
You're right!!!
What the hell am I complaining about??

*whacks herself in the head*
*keeps munching away @ her ice cream*

[banana.livejournal.com]

Hey! You peering at me?

;~)

[andrianna.livejournal.com]

Jus' your journal... ;)

Was trying to find out how the poem form worked... w/no avail. :(

[banana.livejournal.com]

My journal's been a bit thin lately.

More info on pantoums than you can shake a pencil at here:
http://directory.google.com/Top/Arts/Literature/Poetry/Forms/Fixed_Verse_Forms/The_Pantoum/

:: checks andrianna back ::

[andrianna.livejournal.com]

I noticed... but it's still been interesting none the less.

And thank you for the link.... I'll have to try my hand at one later.

*flashes prettily for you*

[banana.livejournal.com]

:: flustered by flashing ::

I thought it would be hard, but it was quite fun. Good luck.

[andrianna.livejournal.com]

Teeheehee.... my plan worked. ;)

I haven't tried it yet, but... I'm sure that we'll get along just fine.

[joei.livejournal.com]

I just can't seem to wax poetic about my lunches. Need more excitement in my meals I guess.

Re:

[msfledermaus.livejournal.com]

We'll get you some Malaysian food, that would do it:)

[joei.livejournal.com]

The daily tuna sandwich and apple sauce just don't thrill me anymore.

Re:

[msfledermaus.livejournal.com]

Yeah...it's hard to write a sonnet about tuna.

[banana.livejournal.com]

You almost did it!

The daily tuna
Sandwich and apple sauce just
Don't thrill me no more.

[joei.livejournal.com]

Thanks for trying to help me out, but I think poetry and I are not compatible in the least.

Spelling flame

[banana.livejournal.com]

Pantoum - think of pants ;~)

Re: Spelling flame

[msfledermaus.livejournal.com]

Oh, DAMN!!! I thought I got it...arrrrgh...

And what's this about pants again, eh?

Pants haiku

[banana.livejournal.com]

Transaclantic'ly
The word "pants" changes meaning
Clothes same body parts

Re: Pants haiku

[msfledermaus.livejournal.com]

I think that's so strange,
But I come from a country
where "Impact"'s now a verb...

*grin*

Good morning, you!!! Wait, wait--afternoon?

Mundane haiku

[banana.livejournal.com]

Yes, it's pm here.
Thinking about going home:
Younger child is ill.

Re: Mundane haiku

[msfledermaus.livejournal.com]

Ohhh..poor little mite!
Going home may well be good.
Hope he gets well soon...

Ms Eff, with chicken soup and sympathy.

Re: Mundane haiku

[banana.livejournal.com]

Ms F, meaning well
Has offered chicken soup for
Vegetarians

;~)

Re: Mundane haiku

[msfledermaus.livejournal.com]

Ohhhhh, DAMN!!! I'm a yutz!!!
Well, ginger beer is soothing too,
and no chicken bits..

*grin*

so sorry, J...*Hangs head in shame*

Hehehe

[banana.livejournal.com]

No problem. 8~)

[banana.livejournal.com]

That's pretty good. Did you like doing it? That was my first one the other day, and I had fun.

Re:

[msfledermaus.livejournal.com]

Yes, I did..It's amazingly subtle, really..I could have a lot of fun with this:)

Thanks again, J!!!

((((((Hugs the banana))))